Class Notes for July 1

Today, I returned last week's homework on quotations and writing that was based on data from a graph. We discussed the proper punctuation for quotations, and the way that indirect quotations have grammatical changes from the original words.

I handed out my own document as a substitute for the simple rubric on page 316. The Chronological Order Essay Evaluation Checklist has more detailed questions about many details we learned in class, and can be used for self-editing and peer-editing.

Some people have already written their first draft completely. Congratulations! Next week we will try to do some peer-editing and self-editing of your second draft. You can also use most of the ideas in the Chronological Order Essay Evaluation Checklist to guide you in your Cause-and-Effect Essay.

Here are some suggestions for the more advanced writers:

• Make a longer and more detailed outline. Some of your outlines are two simple. There should be at least 10 elements (or items) in your outline, as a rule of thumb.
• Lengthen your paper. Make it at least 5 paragraphs long, and add more details, examples, and explanation to your arguments.
• Add support. Does your paper have a quotation with a citation and reference? Add one. Have you added facts and statistics (with a citation and reference) to support your claims? Add some. Have you given examples (possibly with citations and references) to explain and illustrate your points? Try it.
• Make sure you have done your research, written a logically organized paper, and included citations and a reference list.

Rest in Peace (a musical tribute)

Michael Jackson died last Friday (Japan time). I was not a fan of his work but I did appreciate the Jackson Five, a pop group that was very popular with both children and adults due to Michael Jackson's uncanny singing ability. Their music changed America and was a sign of relaxing racial tensions and better relations between African-Americans and Anglo-Americans. Perhaps their music helped create the environment in which Barack Obama could be elected president.

This is the Jackson Five - I WantYou Back (probably 1968 - 1970). Michael is talented. As a child star, his future seemed promising.



Here is the same song performed a few years later in 1972 on Soul Train, a popular black music show. MJ was 13. Check out the fashions and dancing at that time!


I'll Be There was another one of the Jackson Five's great songs. This clip also has Diana Ross (it was her TV special) and Feelin' Alright.